20170909雅思考试写作范例&点评丨海归湾国际教育雅思真题

Amanda老师视频点评
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Amanda老师范例
While I believe public services are vital for a country to function properly, I disagree with the idea that government investment on artists is a waste of money.
There are several reasons why financing artists could be seen as a waste of money. Firstly, governments have more important concerns. Government budgets need to be spent on education, healthcare, infrastructure and security. These public services exert immediate impacts on normal running of social life and determine whether the living environment is up to what the public look forward to. Secondly, most creative artists are so professional that they could earn their own money by selling their work, while the weak like sole parent families and the disabled are in urgent need of financial support from governments.
Despite the above arguments, I believe that artists definitely require help from government funding. China, for example, is a country boasting a large number of folk arts, including music, painting, craftsmanship and acrobatics. They serve to educate people about China, and boost China’s reputation across the world by expressing the culture, customs and history behind the artworks. Thus, paying artists to preserve and produce this kind of art, governments can also protect traditions, customs and behaviors of a country. Without government funding, our life would be much less interesting and attractive and we would lose the rich cultural diversity.
In conclusion, there are good reasons why public services should rely on financial support from governments, but in my opinion money for artists should also come from governments.
解析
思路简述
政府是否应该资助艺术家算是传统考题。同类型的题目2015年曾经考过。本次题目中说到的other important things是个抽象概念,大家一定要在正文中进行细化,例如投资在public services,scientific research等。虽然是agree/disagree的问题,这篇范文用找平衡的方式进行了巧妙回应。
文章结构
Introduction
introduce the topic+ personal opinion
Body 1
通过让步承认一些人的观点即政府不该投资艺术是有道理的
Body 2
转折段亮明个人观点即分析政府资助艺术家有更深远的意义
Conclusion
重申个人观点